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Dawn of a new Day

by furor1

[Part 1]

[Part 2]

[Part 3]


A knock on the door. Twilight looked up from her book, got to her hooves and walked over to it. Opening it she was greeted by the most nervous pegasus she had ever witnessed. "Uhm, hi, Rainbow."

Dash turned her head towards her as if surprised by Twilight's sudden appearance. "Oh, er, hi … Twilight." Twilight raised her eyebrow as she noticed Dash staring at her mouth of all things and biting her own lip as if being in a mental struggle over whether or not to do something.

However, no action came from her friend. After a while Twilight realized that nothing was likely to happen and decided to invite Dash inside. "Do you … want to come in?"

Dash did not move her eyes and merely gave her a "mhm" and a barely noticeable nod.

Twilight stepped back and gave her friend some space to step inside and closed the door while still eyeing Dash. "Is something the matter?" she asked and stepped around Dash to stand in front of her. "If you're having problems with your wing you should tell me."

Dash refused to make eye contact and responded quietly, "I didn't have any problems."

"Okay. You're still worried about your wing aren't you?"

The pegasus mumbled something inaudible to Twilight.

"Sorry, what was that?"

"No," Dash said in a flat tone and sighed. "Okay, maybe a bit."

"Well, you don't need to." Dash faced her and Twilight gave Dash her most caring expressions and saw a small smile appear on the pegasus' face. "There's nothing that can go wrong from here on. In fact, even if your wing hasn't finished regenerating on its own, I've found a way to speed up the process," she finished cheerfully.

Dash's eyebrows rose. "Didn't you say you can't help with that?"

"No, I said Tramping's Method can't help with that. The procedure was never designed to increase bone density and the book Nurse Redheart gave me had no mention of that. However, I found a suiting spell in another book describing treatments for osteoporosis."

"For what now?"

Twilight sighed and chuckled slightly. "Decreased bone density," she explained.

"Oh. Yeah, I guess that fits."

"Yes, it does. So no matter what, your wing will be as good as new by the end of this session."

"Awesome!" Dash visibly lightened up while her nervousness had apparently vanished.

"I knew you'd like it. But first I'll need to examine your wing of course." Twilight stepped closer and Dash spread her wing out in front of her without a prompt. She began to test the firmness of the muscles with her hooves. "Have you been flexing it regularly?"

"Yes," came Dash's response from next to her.

Twilight turned her head and raised an eyebrow. "Any attempts at flying?"

Dash released a deep sigh. "No. I've kept my promise."

"Thank you." Twilight returned her attention to the wing. "I can't imagine how hard it must have been for you - having two wings and not being allowed to fly."

"Well, I guess it's like having a horn and not being allowed to use magic."

"Haha. Yeah, I guess it is. Honestly I wouldn't know what to do." Twilight turned her head towards Dash's again. "How do you earth ponies and pegasi even brush your mane?"

Dash gave an uncomprehending look. "Brush my mane?" she asked, as if that concept were completely alien to her.

Twilight rolled her eyes, smiling, and took a step back from the wing. "Never mind. I'm probably asking the wrong pony here."

"Definitely. So, what? Is my wing ready?"

"Well, the muscles seem strong enough, but I still have to take a look inside. Just hold on for a minute." Twilight closed her eyes and her horn began glowing as she examined the wing's interior structure.

Roughly one minute later Twilight's horn stopped glowing and she opened her eyes, finding Dash suddenly very interested in a faraway wall with something on her cheeks that appeared to Twilight to be the remnants of a … blush? Is Rainbow blushing? Hm, must be the lighting.

She turned her attention back to the wing. "Well, it's pretty much as I expected. The nervous system is back to normal and the bones have gotten stronger." Dash shot her a hopeful glance, her face apparently blush-free. "However, not strong enough." The pegasus let her head hang. "Hey, don't worry. That just means you'll have to wait 30 more minutes."

"I hate waiting."

"Yes, I know. But it's almost over."

"Okay. What do we need to do?"

"Well …" Twilight bit her lip and embarrassedly looked around the room. The description of the treatment in the other book had been very insistent on one point: the patient had to move as minimally as possible or the practitioner had to find a way to compensate for body movements. The realization of what Twilight would have to do did not come without shock to the unicorn.
"Other than Tramping's Method this spell actually creates something from nothing instead of helping your body regrow it. I'll have to create the …" she shot the pegasus a quick glance and searched for another term, "… stuff that makes up your bone and put it in the right place. For me to do that it is absolutely crucial that you move as little as possible relative to me."
Twilight took a deep breath and faced Dash again. "Basically you'll have to lie on your stomach with your wings spread out while I sit on top of you." Dash's eyes went wide and her cheeks assumed the same red color as Twilight's. Now that's a blush, she thought. Well, I don't blame her.

"You have to what?"

Twilight closed her eyes. "If I sit on top of you and hold your wings down with my hooves I can adjust my … aim if you will and compensate for your breathing and other movements."

"But … I can lie still." Dash looked distressed. Twilight would have expected such reaction from herself, not from the usually coolest pony in Ponyville.

Twilight shook her head. "Not still enough," she said. "There really is no other way for us to do it except an anaesthetic. Would you prefer that?"
Dash shook her head. "Hell, no."
"See?" Twilight sighed quietly. "And I imagine you wouldn't like having part of a bone in your muscles or skin either."

The pegasus stared blankly at her, eyes moving back and forth between the unicorn's own, and Twilight began to think that Dash was seriously considering that option.

"Look, the sooner we start the sooner you can fly again."  She offered Dash a comforting smile. She seemed a bit more at ease, although only slightly.

Dash closed her eyes and hung her head for a moment, apparently accepting the safer option. "Alright," she said lifting her head again. "What do we need to do?"

"You just lie down and spread both of your wings and keep them as still as possible."

"Why both wings?"

"I'll have to adjust the bone densities of your new wing and the old wing. And that's easier if it's in the same position or mirror position of the one I'm treating."

Dash sighed. "Okay, let's get this over with. The couch doesn't have enough space, I imagine?"

"No, you'll have to lie down on the floor. Look, this is probably just as awkward for me as it is for you." Dash just gave her a raised eyebrow. Yeah, I didn't expect that to help. "The book says that if the patient is conscious during the treatment then it should just feel like a massage. Although why, it doesn't say. Have you ever had a massage?"

The pegasus shook her head. "Not really."

"Not really?" Twilight repeated.

"Well, we …" Dash looked nervously around the room, "didn't get to finish it. Can we just start?"

"Sure, just lie down and keep calm."

Dash turned to the side and lay down on her stomach before spreading both of her wings out to the sides and closing her eyes.

Twilight took a few deep breaths and stepped over the lying pegasus and slowly rested her rump of Dash's lower back. She felt a flick of Dash's tail softly strike her back, but otherwise saw no noticeable reaction from the pegasus. She pressed her hooves down on the bases of Dash's wings. Hm, unusually fast heart rate. "Don't worry, Rainbow. I'll make it as fast as I can."

"No," Dash said to her surprise and released a sigh, but kept her eyes closed. "Take your time. This sounds more dangerous than the other treatment and I don't want to put that much pressure on you now."

Twilight found herself smiling. "Okay." She closed her eyes, took a deep breath and released it again. "Here it goes."


"So, that should be it." Twilight climbed off of the pegasus and gave her some space to stand up as well. "How did it feel?"

Dash slowly stood up and tried to conceal the massive blush that had spread across her cheeks. "Uhm, like a massage?" she said.

"Great!" Twilight exclaimed.

"Does that mean you're finished? I can fly now?" Dash asked eagerly.

"Yes," Twilight answered, "but do take it easy," she crunched up her face in emphatic pain after Dash had quickly taken off inside the building and almost immediately drifted off to the side and hit a bookshelf. "Or that might happen." Dash was now lying upside down at the bottom of the bookshelf with a confused look and Twilight could not help but laugh.

Dash shook her head. "What happened?"

"Your pectoral muscles probably degenerated over time," Twilight explained while Dash climbed back to her hooves. "But just a bit of training should do the trick."

"Can't you make my muscles stronger again?" Dash asked and flapped her wings to see if they had taken any damage.

"Sorry, magic can't do everything," Twilight lied. She could have easily given that muscle its strength back, but a part of her mind wanted Dash to be closer to her by every means necessary, and with the last of their sessions over that would not be the case if the pegasus would be flying away right now. Of course, she knew it was a silly tactic. But, still, it could work, she told herself. "Now, come here. I need to examine my work," she said.

"You need to what?" The thought of getting close to Twilight again made Dash's heart race.

"Don't worry, Rainbow. It's just a last checkup," Twilight said with a reassuring smile. "I don't bite."

Dash breathed in deeply and walked over to her. She looked at her expectantly and raised an eyebrow as the unicorn sat down on her haunches in front of her. She smiled up at her and tapped her hoof on the ground at Dash's hooves, inviting her to sit down as well. She lowered herself and sat down on the library floor, about two feet away from Twilight.

Twilight rolled her eyes and shifted closer to the pegasus, causing Dash's heart to speed up again, and her own pulse to rise, too. Although both ponies tried to hide their reactions from each other, Twilight was much better trained at it and she wondered why Dash seemed so nervous again all of a sudden. Could it be … she thought. No. No, she's just worried about her wing. She smiled at Dash again. "I'll need you to spread your wings for me, please."

"Both wings?" Dash asked

"Of course. I have to compare them after all." Dash slowly unfolded her wings to their full length, causing Twilight's eyes to shine in amazement before she blinked and collected her thoughts again. "So, let's see." She let her bound journal and a pen float over and hover next to her head. The pen copied notes into the book as Twilight began to study the new wing visually. "Everything seems to have grown like expected. They're the same length, and have-" she paused and repeatedly looked from one wing to the other, "-the same density of feathers."
Twilight raised a hoof to touch the new limb. It retracted slightly at her touch. Dash's face showed an embarrassed expression. Apparently she had not expected Twilight to touch it. It was quickly replaced by a small smile and Twilight continued her examination. She traced her hoof along the wing and gently pressed its joints. After a while she removed her hoof from the wing and gave Dash a bright smile. "The feathers are firmly supported. The bones and joints are strong enough. Everything seems to be in order."

"It's just like before?" Dash asked.

"Yep, just like the other one." Twilight went on and prodded the new wing's feathers with her hoof. That caused it to spasm and forced a short laugh out of the pegasus. Dash quickly shut her mouth and looked off to the side. Twilight, however, raised an eyebrow and repeated the procedure. Prod, spasm and a suppressed laugh. A wide grin spread across her face. "Look who's ticklish!" she exclaimed, causing Dash to turn her head and look at her with a slight panic.

"Please, no-" she started, but it was too late. Twilight already had her hooves in Dash's wings, close to their bases, ruffing up the feathers. The library exploded with Dash's laughter as she fell over on her side. "Stop, stop," she forced out between sharp breaths, but Twilight showed no sign of stopping and instead just laughed deviously.

"Stop? I've only just begun," she proclaimed in a short pause.

"Oh, it. Is. On." Dash quickly shifted closer to her and pressed her own hooves on Twilight's sides below her ribs. That caused the unicorn to laugh hysterically and fall over on top of her. Soon they were both rolling around and forcing the laughter out of each other. After a few minutes the laughing became slightly painful and Twilight was the first to become weaker as her hooves were moving slower and slower and she finally collapsed under the pegasus lying over her, both ponies breathing heavily. "So, you give up?" Dash asked from above.

"Yes," Twilight panted. "I am defeated," she said with a chuckle. "You pegasi just have too much energy."

Dash suddenly felt her face heating up as she realized the position they were both in and she saw a blush appear on the unicorn as well. She looked into Twilight's eyes and saw them blankly staring back into her own. This was what the chance she had been waiting for. Do it, said a voice in her head. You want it, you know she wants it. Do it, filly!

"Rainbow -" Twilight started, but did not get any further as Dash pressed her lips against hers. Twilight's eyes went wide, but she could not bring herself to push Dash away. A rush of emotions flooded her body at the new sensation and she found herself closing her eyes and returning the kiss. Her mind went blank. There now was nothing else in the world but her and the blue filly pressing her body against hers as she closed her front legs around Dash's neck. They were taking in sharp breaths through their nostrils and Twilight felt hooves caressing her cheek and her mane. She felt a soft tail brush against hers and she wrapped her own tail around the rainbow colored one while feeling the slight draft of slowly beating wings over her.

After what felt like an eternity of blissful ecstasy to Twilight, Dash broke the kiss and they both took a series of deep breaths. Dash rolled over to Twilight's side and faced the ceiling, while Twilight kept her eyes closed with a silly smile on her lips. Eventually the first coherent thoughts came back to her, together with the first doubts. Was this a dream again? It could not have been real, but it felt so much different than her other dreams. Rainbow could not possibly feel the same way about her.

"I'm sorry." She heard Dash's voice from beside her. She opened her eyes. So this was real. But what did it mean? Was it what she had been hoping for all this time? Or was it all just in a rush of the moment, caused by the adrenaline pumping through their bodies. She repeated Dash's words in her mind. She was apologizing to her. Apologizing? For what? Did she think the kiss was a mistake? Twilight turned her head and saw the pegasus of her dreams lying next to her on the floor and looking at her with sad eyes.

"Are you … angry with me?" Dash asked quietly.

Twilight scowled. Angry? Why would she be angry with her? Oh, no! She did think this was a mistake. She was going to leave her. This had been her chance and she blew it. Tears she had subdued for months were beginning to well up behind her eyes as she saw Dash turning her head away. The only pony she ever wanted to be with over everything else was going to leave her, rejecting her.

She could live with the uncertainty, with her dreams and hopes that she might one day be strong enough to tell Rainbow about her feelings. She could handle waiting and not knowing, but she did not know if she could handle rejection. Dash began sitting up and tears began flowing down Twilight's cheeks. No! She had to tell her. She had to tell her now. But, how? She was growing desperate as she saw Dash now standing, facing away from her. "Wait, Rainbow!" she pleaded while trying to suppress her sobs, looking at the pegasus through teary eyes.

"Wait?" Dash repeated quietly with a crackling voice without looking back and sniffed, which Twilight could not hear. "Why?"

Twilight closed her eyes and mustered all the strength she had left. "Because …" she took a deep, ragged breath. Tell her! "Because I love you!" she forced out, nearly whispering, and allowed the tears to come now freely.

Twilight could not see Dash eventually turning around and was oblivious to the hoofsteps coming closer to her. All she could feel after the wave of despair had hit her and she was crying on the floor was the gentle touch of a hoof on her cheek. She opened her eyes and turned her head, seeing a blue shape through her blurry vision before being drawn into another kiss. This one ended quickly, however, and she instinctively wrapped her front legs around the pegasus again and held her in a tight embrace, determined not to let her go this time. Together they rolled over on the side and she felt the hoof from before stroking her mane, trying to calm her down, but she could not stop herself from crying.

She sobbed audibly into the multicolored mane, giving voice to all the frustration and desperation that had been amassing inside of her for the past months. All the failed attempts at building up her strength, all the blissful dreams that had ended in tears, all the pressure she had put on herself and nearly collapsed under, all of her fantasies that she feared would never come true and all the long hours she had spent watching Dash from her balcony practicing her stunts without the pegasus knowing.

She had learned over time to hide her feelings better in public, until the time was right, she had told herself. She grew apathetic and detached towards strangers and put on smiles for her friends. But that had not changed a thing. On the inside she had been tearing herself apart and had begun to hate herself for her own cowardice, thinking that it could be any day that Rainbow would start dating somepony else. The thought of the filly she loved being together with someone else had nearly broken her.

Dash had been patiently holding and comforting her and eventually the flow of tears slowed down and stopped, leaving her and Twilight in a firm hold of each other, the unicorn's muzzle still buried in Dash's wet mane.

After a few moments Dash also stopped stroking her mane and simply rested her hoof on her neck. "Twilight?" she asked.

Twilight gave her a quiet "Hm?" as response, but otherwise did not move.

"Can we … talk?"

Twilight sighed. She knew this had to come, eventually. She took her head back and saw Rainbow Dash's concerned look. Twilight gave her a small smile under her reddened and tired eyes. "Yes," she said weakly, "of course. I'm … sorry for the bawling."

Dash smiled softly at her. "No, it's fine."

"It's just that this has been gnawing on me for so long, eating me up from the inside, that -"

Dash planted another kiss on her lips, causing them both to close their eyes and Twilight's body to go limp. After they broke the kiss they kept their eyes closed and Dash rested her forehead against Twilight's. "Really, it's okay. I understand." In truth, however, Dash knew as well as Twilight that she was far from understanding what Twilight had felt, but she accepted the comforting words and pushed that issue away for another time.

"So …" Twilight gulped, but keeping her eyes closed, almost fearing the response, "do you feel the same?"

"I don't know," Dash said, upon which Twilight expected another wave of sadness rolling in. "I don't know if I can call it 'love'," Dash continued. "I've had girlfriends before. One or two. And I thought I knew love." Dash took a deep breath and opened her eyes, shifting her position so that Twilight would open hers, too. She looked deeply into the unicorn's eyes for a moment. "I've just never felt anything like this before."

This was enough for Twilight. She knew now that Rainbow loved her or was at least close to it, even if she did not know it or could not admit it to herself. A wide smile was showing on her face as she leaned forward and finally gave Dash a kiss of her own. They held the kiss for as long as their lungs could support their efforts, Twilight rolling onto Dash for a while, but eventually broke it and lay on their sides again, their foreheads once more pressed against each other. Twilight pulled Dash's body closer to herself. "How long?" she asked quietly.

Dash understood what she had meant. "Second session, I think."

Twilight laughed quietly. "I knew there was something odd about your behavior after that."

"Hehe. Yeah, at first I thought I was sick or something. A side effect from the treatment. You?"

Twilight sighed deeply. "I can't really give you one specific point in time. But it's been a few months now, actually. Four or five."

"Five months?" Dash repeated and looked up at Twilight. "Why didn't you say anything?"

Twilight now also lifted her head and looked sadly into Dash's eyes. "How would you have reacted?" Seeing the realization on Dash's face she continued. "See? That's why I didn't tell you." She gulped. "I don't think I could have handled rejection."

"Well," Dash said with a wide smile, "we have a happy ending now, don't we?"

Twilight giggled softly and returned Dash's smile. "Yes, we do." She planted a short kiss on the pegasus' lips. "Although I don't hope this is an end."

Dash laughed. "Oh, believe me. It's far from it." With that they nuzzled each other and resumed their embrace, the purple unicorn resting her head on Dash's and listening to the calm rhythm of her breath.

Twilight was the first to speak again after a few minutes. "Rainbow?" she asked.

"Hm?" came the answer from the mare in her forelegs.

"I don't feel like standing up," Twilight said with a chuckle.

"Hehe. Me neither."

"So what do we do now?"

"I have an idea." Dash rolled on top of Twilight, giving her a playful grin. "You just have to hold on tight."

Twilight knew what she was planning. "Are you sure you can manage both of us with your weak muscle?"

"Sure I can. That little crash earlier was nothing. I can find my balance."

"Well, if you're sure. I trust you."

"You just handle the doors and I'll get us up there in no time."

Twilight wrapped her four legs tightly around her and together they took off, both of them laughing at first. They toppled in the beginning and Dash quickly began panting and sweating, but they steadily made their way up the stairs and into Twilight's room, the unicorn magically closing the door behind them.


Twilight and Rainbow Dash had spent the time until evening in the library's bedroom, lying on the bed, cuddling, kissing, telling each other secrets about themselves and simply wallowing in the pleasure of their partner's company with Twilight's favorite music playing in the background. Right now Dash was lying on top of Twilight, forelegs wrapped around the purple neck, and staring intently into her indigo eyes, while Twilight's forelegs went around Dash's body, her hooves meeting over her wings.

"How do you think the others will react?" Dash asked.

"Hm. Well, I know Rarity won't have a problem with us."

Dash laughed shortly. "Yeah. I went to her for advice before I came here."

"You did?" Twilight asked with a grin. "You actually asked for advice. What would Rainbow Dash have needed help with?"

Dash narrowed her eyes. "Ha ha. But that's what she asked me, too."

"Well, what did she tell you?"

"Hehe. She actually told me that I should kiss you as soon as you opened the door." Twilight began to giggle under Dash. "A big, long, sloppy kiss, she said." Both ponies broke into laughter.

"So that's why you kept staring at my mouth!" Twilight exclaimed and resumed her giggling.

"Hehe. Yeah. I wasn't exactly subtle, was I?"

"Not in the slightest. I've never seen you so nervous."

"Probably because I've never been so nervous."

"Aww. But you are so adorable when you're insecure." Twilight lowered her hoof and rubbed Dash's cheek with it.

"You know, you're the only pony I'll ever let me call that."

"Really? Well then, I'll have to make good use of that, won't I?"

"Don't overdo it," warned Dash and gave Twilight a quick kiss. "But what I actually meant was how they'll react when they find out that we're …" Dash's voice trailed off.

Twilight raised an eyebrow. "That we're … what?"

"Fillyfoolers," Dash nearly forced out. "Shouldn't that be an issue?"

Twilight's eyes widened a little. "I don't know. Should it?"

"I don't know," Dash repeated. "I mean I've been teased in flight school after I got my cutie mark and when I lived in Cloudsdale for some time, but not really since I moved here."

Twilight smiled up at her new girlfriend. "Come here," she said softly and pulled Dash's head down into a long kiss and felt Dash's body become weaker over hers. "See?" she asked, after pulling her lips away, while Dash was regarding her with a dreamy smile. "Did that feel wrong?" Dash slowly shook her head. "You can't argue against nature, Rainbow." She pulled Dash around so that they we're both lying on their sides and gave her another short kiss. "I love you and that's all that should matter."

The smile on Dash's face got wider. "Uhm, what was that?"

"I said I love you, Rainbow," Twilight repeated also with a wide smile and gave the pegasus another kiss.

Dash's expression changed into a grin. "I'm sorry, can you repeat that?"

Twilight now pressed her lips forcefully against Dash's. "I love you," she whispered and gave her another kiss. "I love you." Another, this one next to Dash's mouth. She pressed her chest against Dash's and could feel the blue mare's heartbeat rising. "I love you." Another on the cheek, heating up the cyan face. "I love you." A kiss next to the eye, and Dash pulling in a ragged breath. "I love you." Her last kiss, this one under the ear, causing Dash's wings to tremble shortly. "I'll always love you," she whispered directly into Dash's ear. Her wings closed around Twilight's body and the pegasus pulled her back to eye level and into a tight embrace.

"You know," Dash said quietly into the unicorn's mane, "I can't shake the feeling that you might love me."

Twilight began giggling and nuzzled Dash's cheek before looking into her rose eyes again. "Those were for all the times I didn't say it. All the times I've been to scared and afraid of what might happen."

"Wow. This has really been nagging on you, hasn't it?" Twilight closed her eyes and nodded sadly in response. "Do you … wanna talk about it?"

Twilight slowly shook her head, smiling. "No," she said and opened her eyes. "Right now I only want happy thoughts. We can talk about it later if you want."

"Happy thoughts, huh? I think I can do that." Twilight looked at her expectantly with raised eyebrows. "Hey, what's blue and smells like red paint?"

Twilight began giggling softly. "That's not what I meant," she said and gave Dash's shoulder a bump with her hoof.

"Oh, come on. What's blue and smells like red paint?" Dash insisted.

Twilight sighed. "I don't know?"

"Blue paint."

Twilight started laughing louder than she intended and rolled onto her back and out of the pegasus' embrace. "Th-That's … s-so … s-s-stupid," she brought out between breaths.

"Yep," Dash said to herself and retracted her wings to the sides of her body. "Gets them every time."

Eventually the laughing stopped and Dash shifted over to Twilight, lifted herself on top of the unicorn again and once more slung her forelegs around her neck.

"So …" Dash started and gave Twilight a short kiss. "Why do you … you know?"

Twilight released a short breath. "Why do I what?" she asked, smiling like in pure bliss.

"Love me." Dash said with a hint of anticipation in her voice. "Why do you love me?"

"Hmm. I don't know if I can point to one reason specifically." Twilight looked away in thought, but quickly faced Dash again. "Well, for starters, I think you're the most beautiful pony I've ever met."

Rainbow Dash was trying her hardest to contain her laughter. "No, seriously," she said after a while.

"I mean it," Twilight stressed.

"How could you even compare me to somepony like Rarity?"

"Oh, you don't have to cover yourself in makeup, style your mane or wear fancy dresses to be pretty. You have a whole other kind of beauty." Twilight saw the incredulous look on Dash's face. "Don't believe me? Okay, let's start with your hair. Other ponies' usually have just one color. They can style it, make it shine in the light, but that doesn't change a thing to me. They're still monotone and boring. Yours on the other hoof simply has every color." She slowly ran a hoof through the perplexed Dash's mane and considered each of its hues. "It's a rolling sea of red, magenta, orange, yellow, green, cyan, deep blue, violet and purple. The way it flows in the wind, the colors mixing with one another-" she closed her eyes as if she was remembering a particular scene, "-the sunlight and even the moonlight reflecting off of it, especially when it's still slightly wet from kicking clouds." She sighed deeply. "It's just the most marvelous display of colors I can imagine."

Twilight opened her eyes and looked into Dash's own with excitement and adoration. "And your eyes. Oh, I could write whole books about your eyes. I could lose myself in them, just lying here and studying their depths, imagining the places they would take me. They promise adventure, excitement and the most amazing time of my life." She stopped her monologue for a few moments in which she simply stared, absorbed, into Dash's rose colored eyes before resuming her speech. Her eyes travelled further down Dash's body, as did her hoof. "Now, your wings."

"Uhm, my wings?" Dash asked. "But you made one of them."

Twilight blinked, not having expected to be interrupted. She quickly looked the pegasus in the eyes. "Oh, no. I only helped regrow it. I just took care of the little details and gave shape to what was already there, under the surface-" her eyes found the new wing again, "-waiting to be released." She slid her hoof between Dash's body and the wing tucked at its side and gently pressed against it. Dash understood the instruction and dramatically spread both of her wings to their full length, watching Twilight take a deep breath in amazement.

"They're the most magnificent set of wings I've ever seen," she continued, her hoof smoothly tracing the limb of the newly grown wing. "I can only imagine the places you could go with them, the speeds you could reach. While I was shaping it I felt their strength and firmness. And they have to be, seeing as they're driven by powerful muscles." Her hoof found the side of Dash's chest again and the pegasus gave her wings a waft, but not enough to lift both of them off the bed. Twilight simply chuckled and said, "you have the body of a true athlete, Rainbow."

"Just wait until my other muscle grows back, too," Dash said quietly, causing Twilight to lock eyes with her again. "I'm going to take you to the stars."

Twilight smiled softly and leaned upward. "I can't wait," she whispered into Dash's ear and gave her another kiss on the lips. She sighed and continued her monologue. "And now we come to the best part," she said with a grin and both of her hooves grabbed the pegasus' rear, causing Dash's eyes to widen and her wings to jerk up tall in the air. "Your flank," Twilight continued and closed her eyes. "Oh, I'm not gonna lie. I've had dreams about that flank. I feel like I could spend hours just staring at it and thinking about the things I would do if we were alone. And … well, to be completely honest I have done exactly that." Twilight's cheeks were heating up and becoming slightly red. "Many times."

Rainbow Dash closed her mouth and began collecting herself, blinking several times. "Uhm, we are alone," she said with a playful smile.

Twilight returned the smile. "Yes we are," she said, wrapped her forelegs around her lover's neck and pressed her lips against Dash's. She rolled them both over on the side and continued the passionate kiss, stroking her mane and pushing her body against the pegasus'. Eventually they broke apart, both of them breathing somewhat heavily. Twilight slid her lower hoof under and past her neck and rested her head on her leg, while gently caressing Dash's cheek with her other hoof. "But that's just one reason and by far not the biggest," she continued her answer. "I don't think I can even find words for how I love your personality. Not now, anyway."

Twilight paused and saw that Rainbow Dash was about to say something, but she quickly cut her off. "But the biggest reason I have for loving you is: I simply do. I'm sorry, it's not something I can explain or analyze critically. When you're not with me I feel like there's something missing, something that needs to be there to make it all complete. I just want to be close to you, kiss you; feel your touch, your heartbeat and your breathing; hear you brag about your newest stunt or just lie here and fall asleep next to you, knowing that you'll still be there in the morning when I wake up." Dash had a stunned look on her face. "I hope that answers your question," she said with a chuckle.

"Wow," Rainbow Dash said. "I don't know if I can tell you how I feel like that. I mean I've been trying to think of something, anything, but-" she took a small pause in which she looked away in thought before looking at Twilight again, "-every time I try to describe you in my head, the only words I can think of are 'cool' and 'amazing'." Dash's voice showed a hint of desperation.

"Oh, it's fine, Rainbow, really. I know talking isn't one of your strong suits," Twilight giggled.

"But I want to tell you so badly, show how much I want to be with you-"

Twilight had put a hoof on Dash's mouth. "You don't have to. Not now. Take your time to think if you feel you need to. All I want to hear from you now is that I can trust you, that you'll be there for me just like I'll always be there for you. Can you promise me that?" She removed her hoof from Dash's mouth.

Das wore a serious expression on her face and gave her a determined "Yes."

Twilight gave her a loving smile and placed her head on Dash's chest, wrapping her forelegs around her. "Thank you," she said. It was not nighttime yet - the sun was just beginning to set - but right now there was nowhere else she wanted to be. She was finally with the filly she loved and nothing in the world could take that away from her. All she wanted to do now was to simply lie there and listen to her new lover's heartbeat until she could fall asleep.

The soft music was beginning to fill the room, both ponies listening in silence. Eventually the song changed, Twilight recognizing it immediately. "Hmmm," she moaned, "one of my favorites."

"I think I know that song," Dash said. "It kinda fits our situation, doesn't it?" Twilight only hummed in agreement and began silently mouthing the lyrics.

The thoughts of yesterday forgotten,
I like the way this new skin feels.
Bring me splinters of tomorrow,
Collect the parts where I win.

"Hey, I forgot to ask," Dash began. "What happened to Spike? Shouldn't he be here?"

"Sleepover with the Cutie Mark Crusaders," Twilight answered with a tired voice.

"Heh, wonder what they're getting into."

Concrete breath and dust filled tears,
A one way ride to inner peace,
I never thought I'd join the others

"You know what Twilight?" Dash asked in a resolved tone.

"Hm?" came the quiet response.

"… I think I love you, too."

Twilight shifted her body closer to her and moved her head higher up Dash's chest. "I know," she said and closed her eyes.

Dash gave her a kiss on the head shortly behind her horn. With an idyllic smile she resumed her pondering over how she could show her affection to Twilight.

Dawn of a new day
Never looked … as good as this.


Rainbow Dash woke up early the next morning with the sun barely above the horizon. She saw that she was still holding Twilight, but they were lying on their sides with the unicorn facing away from her. It was not unusual for the flyer to wake up that early and normally she would have just drifted back to sleep, but now she tried to stay awake so she could better enjoy the sight and the feeling of holding Twilight close to her. She shifted her position slightly and draped a wing over the unicorn. Last night she had not gotten further in her search for how to express herself to Twilight.

The only new thought she had, besides 'cool' and 'amazing', was 'absolutely awesome' - not very impressive in her opinion. But seeing her wing covering the purple mare - that was when the idea hit her. She knew how fast she could forget even important things and she would have tried to find something to write it down. How hard could it be to find a pen and paper in a library, after all? But she also knew that it was important for Twilight to be there when she woke up, even if it was only today, and she did not want to risk upsetting her. So she just kept to refining the idea and repeating it in her head, not moving from her embrace of the unicorn.

Eventually Twilight woke up. She yawned and saw blue forelegs around her and felt a soft wing covering her under the blanket and the familiar sensation she had been experiencing all yesterday evening returned to her stomach. She turned around and was greeted by a beaming smile.

"Good morning," Dash cheered and gave her a short kiss.

"Mmph! Morning," Twilight gave her a sleepy smile,h eyes still half closed. "How long have you been awake?"

"Oh, about an hour, I guess."

Twilight giggled and gave Dash a soft hit on the shoulder with her hoof. "You didn't have to wait for me."

"Yeah, but I wanted to. Besides I got the most awesome idea and I just had to tell you before I forget it."

"Oh? What is it?"

Rainbow Dash explained the idea to her. Twilight was surprised at first and then incredibly touched, but also a bit concerned. What Dash had in mind seemed oddly fitting, but still somewhat hasty to Twilight.

"Do you think you can do it?" Dash asked her.

"Sure I can do it," Twilight said carefully. "But I might not be able to reverse it."

"Why would I want to reverse it?"

"Doesn't that seem a little rash to you?"

Dash sighed. "Twi, I've spent the last hour thinking about it. I want this. You said yourself that I'm not that good with words, but I want to show how much I want to be with you. I want the whole world to know about it."

Twilight now also let out a sigh before giving Dash a loving smile again. "Make it official, hm? If that's what you want then yes, we can do it."

"Thank you!" Dash exclaimed and kissed her again before pulling her into a tight hug.

"Hehe, don't thank me yet. Let's see how it turns out first."

"Oh, I know it's gonna be awesome."


The group of four ponies stood at the entrance to Sugarcube Corner, chatting with each other about the letters they had received from Twilight and Rainbow Dash.

"Do you girls know why they wanted to meet us all here?" Rarity asked.

"I bet Rainbow jus' wants to show us that new wing of hers," Applejack responded.

"But the letter mentioned a 'surprise'," Fluttershy said into her mane.

"I love surprises!" Pinkie Pie exclaimed and began bouncing up and down, causing Fluttershy to emit a weak "Eep!"

"Well, I reckon we don' have to wait any longer. Here they come," Applejack said and pointed her hoof at a pair of ponies approaching the group. "Hm. They're walkin' awfully close to each other."

"Did Rainbow Dash just rub her cheek on Twilight's?" Rarity asked nopony in particular as a smile crept onto her lips that none of the others noticed.

"Oh, look how happy they are. They're laughing!" Pinkie Pie proclaimed.

Rarity chuckled to herself. "That looks like more than simple laughing, my dear."

"What's that on Dashie's wing?" Pinkie Pie pointed at Rainbow Dash's side, ignoring Rarity's comment.

"The other one has it too," Fluttershy said looking up.

"Hm. Could they be something like casts?" Rarity proposed.

"On both sides?" Applejack asked her with a raised eyebrow.

The two ponies finally reached the group. "Hi girls!" Twilight exclaimed brightly as she and Rainbow Dash approached.

"Heya!" Dash said and waved her hoof.

"Well you're sure lookin' happy, sugarcube." Applejack said with a grin. "Something good happened, I reckon?"

"You betcha!" Dash said and jumped happily up and down. "I can finally fly again!"

"Well, don't keep us waiting, dear," Rarity said. "Show us."

"Uhm," Twilight started and pawed the ground, looking at Dash and then the others again. "There is something else I would like to tell you all first."

Dash groaned beside her. "Come on, Twi. What difference does it make if we tell them or they just see it?"

A small sigh escaped Twilight. "Yeah, I guess you're right. Go on, then, show them," she said with a smile and bumped Dash's shoulder with her own.

"Woohoo!" Dash exclaimed, spread her wings and took to the air.

She performed a loop above the group and slowly circled them before coming to a halt, hovering over the position she had just left at Twilight's side. She was careful not to move from her current position so that they could all see the inside of her wings. The group of friends gasped audibly. There, among her usual cyan blue feathers, were also some new, purple feathers. In fact about half the feathers on both wings were the color of Twilight's coat, chosen in a seemingly random pattern. The four ponies were stunned and stared at them with open mouths; Fluttershy had sat down on the ground.

Rarity was the first of them to regain her composure. "They're beautiful," she said quietly and regarded Dash and Twilight with a beaming smile. "So it worked?"

Dash floated to the ground next to Twilight and wrapped a wing around her, pulling her closer. "Sure did," she said brightly.

Fluttershy was the next to say something. "So you two are …" she began.

"Sure are," Dash exclaimed, causing Twilight to blush as she nuzzled the purple mare.

Applejack looked confused from the two ponies to a happily smiling Fluttershy. "What?" she asked and turned to a beaming Rarity. "What's happenin'? I don' get it."

"Ugh, Applejack." Rarity groaned and rubbed her forehead with her hoof. "Can't you see?" She pointed her hoof at Twilight and Dash while looking at the farmer. "They're a couple now."

Applejack raised her eyebrows and turned her head towards them. Twilight was resting her head against Dash's while looking at her with a blush and a lowered head. Dash was wearing a winning smile as if she had just performed another sonic rainboom in front of them. "Well Ah'll be …" the farmer started as a grin appeared on her face as well. "How'd that happen?"

"Oh, I'm so happy for you Twilight," Fluttershy said, brightly smiling at the purple unicorn. "And for you, Dash, of course," she added.

"You know what this calls for," Pinkie Pie exclaimed and began bouncing around the group.

"Lemme guess," Applejack chuckled. "A party?"

"Yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes! A big party with cake and music and streamers and dancing and punch and friends and candy and more friends and more candy!" She suddenly stopped, gasped and looked at Dash with big eyes. "Did your trail change color, too? Has it more purple in it now?"

Dash looked at Twilight with an irritated expression, which Twilight only returned. "Uhm, I don't know," she said slowly and looked back at the bubbly mare.

"It's unlikely, but it could be. I don't know how your trail forms," Twilight said with a look at Dash.

"I haven't flown fast enough yet," Dash continued. "My muscle is still a little weak on this side." She rubbed her side with the new wing on it.

"Well, don't overexert yourself now, darling," Rarity said, "or you might injure something else."

Dash waved her hoof. "Don't worry. I'll take it easy. Besides, I've got the best nurse in the world right now." She planted a kiss on Twilight's cheek, causing her to giggle.

"I bet that's a mighty interesting story you two have to tell," Applejack said. "Care to share it?"

Both ponies looked at each other briefly. "Sure," Twilight said. "If we can leave out some details," she added with a chuckle.

"Oh, but of course," Rarity replied. "But let's not do it out here. We can have it much more comfortable inside." Her horn glowed and the door to Sugarcube Corner opened.

Pinkie Pie bounced in first, followed by Fluttershy. When Applejack and Rarity got to the door at the same time, the farmer took a step back, smiled at Rarity and stretched out a hoof. "After you, my lady," Applejack said.

"Oh, thank you, dear," Rarity proclaimed somewhat surprised and gracefully trotted inside.

After Applejack entered the bakery Twilight and Rainbow Dash stopped short of the doorstep. "Phew, that could have gone worse," Twilight said.

"Yeah," Dash replied scratching her head. "I half expected Applejack to be … disappointed."

"Applejack? Why?"

"Well, I've always thought she kinda … likes me."

Twilight was laughing now. "Don't be silly, Rainbow."

"Hey, what's that supposed to mean?"

"Don't you know? She's with Rarity."

Dash was dumbfounded. "Rarity?" she repeated. "But … Why? How?"

"Do you remember their trip to the rodeo some time ago?"

"You're kidding me, right?" Dash asked, to which Twilight shook her head. "That was months ago! How didn't I notice anything?"

Twilight suppressed a witty answer as a voice called them from inside the building. "Are you two comin' inside now?" It was Applejack. "You better not be makin' out out there."

"We're coming," Twilight called inside.

Suddenly Pinkie Pie appeared at the entrance, took the new couple by their hooves and dragged them inside. "Come on, now," she exclaimed. "You have to tell us everything."

More laughter emanated from inside the building until the door to Sugarcube Corner closed itself with a magical shimmer.
Part 3 of my fic, incidentally also most of what I wrote first.


Main Characters:



- RainbowSparkle -> Objectively the best pairing in MLP.

Other notes:

The song I’m referencing here is ‘Dawn of a new Day’ by In Flames. Guess where I got the title from :icondashhiyaplz:


:iconzaehlas: wrote a short continuation of this story called Dawn of Flight: [link] Check it out.

:iconfenwolf2003: also wrote a spin-off called 'Dead of a New Day' [link] If you want a winning combination of ponies, zombies and the best pairing in the whole world, check it out.
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TwiDashOTP Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2015
The. Best. Story. Ever. It was beautifully written, so much so that the instant I started reading, I could visualize every single thing that was going on, even to the smallest detail. I also especially loved the added touch of the purple feathers.
Orangecraz Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
Dang it, it's so heartwarming, the average individual would have to go be extremely violent or stupid to survive reading it! Good thing I'm immune.
morion87 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Correct me if I'm wrong, but did they ever say how Rainbows's feathers changed collor?  I can't really think of anykind of magic that would do that.
LowLyric89 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sorry, but when I see the words dawn of a new day all I can think of is :iconmajorasmaskplz:

Nice story though, very nicely written
jdogthekiller44 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
RedspeederalexRBLX Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
god, every time i look at the comic it makes me trace back to here! i just love this story!
furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you do!
RedspeederalexRBLX Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
but something is missing....oh yeah! MOAR! =3 I bet I'm speaking for all of us when I say that we wanna know what happened in Sugarcube Corner when the story ended. just a suggestion from a brony, u can do what u want cuz I aint God.
Chihuahuapie Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014
I completely disagree some stories should be up to the imaginations of the readers. I think the story actually should have ended with the song. Plus what would happen after sugar cube corner? They get ice cream? Who would write a fanfic about the mane six getting ice cream?
LunaoftheCrescent Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
this is the first shipping fanfic i've ever read, and it's AMAZING. you did a great job. i found it especially touching myself, I think anyone who has had a girl/boy in their life at some point can understand the incredible feeling that one has when love collides like this. so well done. Thank you for this read, was definitely worth my time. ^^

furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Heh, thanks for your praise.
electricdragon505 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
I feel this story should end with this song.[link]
Syfrax Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. That was amazing, cute and incredibly lovable. Now before my "Heart Meter" bursts, I'm going to have to go and get some violence to fill the "Soul Force Gauge". RAAAAAGH! HULK SMASH, MERCER CRASH, HELLER KILL... Dante takes the bill XD
I-DawnofDay-I Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Great Story.
I really liked MLP, but first this Story turned me into a Brony and a TwiDash-fan at the same time.
So I have to thank you for this.
RedspeederalexRBLX Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
LOL same with me! But I watched the episodes on YT and then did som venturing and found a 'dramatic' reading for this story and not only was it halarious, it got me interested and curious about the story so, like any curious mind, I went online and clicked the link in the vid which took me to a site called Equestria Daily, with the Cartoon Network title set, and clicked the link that took me to part one and at first I was like "Oh, God! how long until I get to the good part!" and eventually I did and I just can't get over how it started with Twi checking the wings and eventually tickling Rainbo Dash and the story ended in a way that is disappointing most readers.
furor1 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. Always nice to that.
Onyx123 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This story was beautiful and heart warming. I'm not a HUGE fan of twidash stuff, im more a pinkiedash myself, but this was amazing to read and made smile throughout. So thank you for a memorable and touching story. ^^
Anubis-Reborn Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
When i first read this all those months ago i was blown away by how much i enjoyed it, and how well written it was.
Now all this time later reading it again, i have to say this is the fic that not only made me love Twidash but is absolutely up there with my favorites fics of all time.
furor1 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, thank you. Anything to spread the TwiDash. Also, I've made a lot of changes to how this story is written over the past ... damn, almost a year now. Anyway, I'm glad you like it so much.
MrSir2552 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
I had the weirdest/awesomest boner when Twilight grabbed RD's flank. #instaWingboner
viktorivov Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
I was a very good and cool story.I read the continuation and the sequel to that and i made it just perfect.Hey if you somepony makes more can you tell me [link]
furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I doubt there are gonna be more continuations. Those three are pretty separate from me and only scotsman asked me to look over his story some times. Honestly, I'm not too fond of everything that happened after Zaehlas' part, so I probably wouldn't announce it.
FiReFoXx83 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012
That was a truly, truly, truly beautiful story. The way you described Twilight's inner torment all the way up to the payoff she finally recieved were all beautiful, brilliant, and genuinely heartwarming. Your story puts mine to shame. I wish I had the patience and the ability to craft words as wonderfully as you did.
Truly a unique and superb tale, my friend. Thank you for sharing.
furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hah, right, patience. I rushed this story out within a week and it's only gotten minor changes since then. But I'm glad that you like it.
FiReFoXx83 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
I did. It was fantastic. Excellent work.
DolphinBuster Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I LOVED the story! There is just one thing i don't understand, The purple feathers? e_e How did she get Purple Feathers ?
furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Remember Dash's idea after she woke up? The one the narrator didn't mention explicitly?
DolphinBuster Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh....I get it , Kind of ^-^
Kirkwood89 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012
Hey hey. I read this last night and didn't get to properly show my love. For whatever reason I left it on Dawn of Change, probably because I'd already commented on part 1 of this and on Dawn of Flight so yea. Here's what I wrote on Dawn of Change though

"Damnit you three are beautiful individuals. I loved all your fics and they fit together so well. I'm kind of sad that it's over actually. Well done all around!

I should go back and give Zaehlas my love too. I was too caught up in the story to comment on his. ^^""

I realize that last part is redundant since I'm posting it here but I figured I'd leave it in for completeness' sake :P
brambo96 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012
Love the story!
iamthejam Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
Excellent story.

Though you should have included that RD would have needed to eat A LOT of food for the regeneration process, after all, the additional mass had to come from somewhere and I doubt even Twilight's magic could have converted all that energy into mass again, not without making the ambient temperature drop dramatically. :D
furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"So is it magic or science?"

Thank you. That's something I'll keep in mind for the revisions. Maybe I'll have Twilight hoard hayfries just for Dash.
iamthejam Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
Glad to be of help :D
GreaterGood03 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012
Fantastic, wonderful story!
Great job! I look forward to reading the sequel
furor1 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! They're more like unofficial sequels, though. Unless you're waiting for one from me.
xXiaoDrag0n Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012
Hey :iconfuror1:! I have finally posted the Sequel to Dawn Of Change change by :icontn-scotsman: Hope you can check it out soon :D
xXiaoDrag0n Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012
I am writing a sequel to ~tn-scotsman's Dawn Of Change now, :D, this whole series is so totally awesome that i got to try to write a fanfic now. I just began writing it afew hours ago, it's not completed yet, but I have decided to name the fanfic Dawn Of A New Beginning. :pc:
furor1 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, I guess I can't stop you then. To be honest, I didn't enjoy Dawn of Change that much. Zaehlas' continuation was cute and added something nice to my story, but I think scotsman took it too far. Fenwolf's story was basically a joke fic he wrote for me and I'm not sure if he'll ever continue it. Honestly, I think you'd be better off writing up your own ideas instead of continuing someone else's. I picked up writing by trying to continue another brony's story, too, but I stopped when I realized that even I wouldn't want to have read what I was writing. But hey, what do I know? You might just be a good writer. I haven't seen anything in your gallery, so I can't judge that. So ... good luck? Tell me when it's done :iconrainbowdashwinkplz:
xXiaoDrag0n Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012
Actually I did attempt to write a Fanfic before, a continuation of a SonTails story titled We Did What if i am right to be exact, but I wasn't just as inspired as I am now from the whole of Dawn Of series, so I decided to scarped the Fanfic. So yeah, I already spent more than half a day writing the story since yesterday, and I don't planned on stoping now, as it will help me in killing sometime as I am on Hospitalisation Leave for 29 more days due to a fractured ankle. XD
furor1 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't publish it as soon as you think you're finished. Let it rest for a day or so and read over it again before uploading it.
xXiaoDrag0n Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012
Sorry, here's the link, I have forgotten about it. XD [link]
xXiaoDrag0n Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012
Hey, I just wrote a short TwiDash fanfic while listening to I Can Wait Forever By Simple Plan, I am still writing the Dawn Of A New Beginning but I just got to write a short fanfic based of the song as I listened to it, please do check it out. :D
xXiaoDrag0n Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012
Well, it's because I haven't actually wrote a Fanfic before, this is my first time. :D Sure I tell you went it's done.
pointpoint Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012

God dammit dude, stop making me smile... *reads ending*


Stupid..Big Ass.... Grin.
furor1 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe. Yup. That's TwiDash for you.
Railrugs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
Awesome ending, really enjoyed reading this whole thing. Just two things I noticed, you could always Ctrl + F to find them quicker:

They held the kiss for as long as their lunges could support their efforts,

I believe you meant to type "lungs" rather than "lunges".

Has it more purple in it now?

That doesn't exactly sound like something Pinkie Pie would say.

Anyway, a very cute chapter. Twilight's long dialogue near the end is pretty much purple prose, but in a good way, if that were possible. She's a character, and I think it would be much like her to explain her love to Rainbow Dash like that. I mostly liked what she had to say about her eyes.

The Rarijack part was also nice. Perhaps you could have added some super-subtle hints in the previous chapters, or maybe you did but they just went over my head. A good addition either way.

The inclusion of those lyrics was a pretty cool thing to do. I haven't listened to In Flames in a while, but I'm just going to guess that this is one of their softer songs (Like Come Clarity of Cloud Connected, which I guess would make for a more depressing fic if you based it around them). Going to give it "Dawn of a New Day" a listen just because of this fic.

Good job, sort of wish I could emphasize on that, but yeah.
furor1 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm, to me that does sound like something from Pinkie Pie. Why do you think it isn't? But you're right about the lungs.

Well, the most subtly subtle hint at RariJack I can think of is Rarity and AJ approaching Twilight together in the hospital. But even then there's more intimacy between Pinkie and Fluttershy in that part than between those two.

And I could actually imagine Twilight already having formed that monologue in her head and given it to Dash in her imagination a couple of times.

Dawn of a new Day is one of their soft songs. I think it's on youtube, but I can't be sure. Too lazy to look now. I actually plan to dedicate a drawing to Come Clarity at some point. That song is just so awesome.

Thank you for your comments. I think they'll be helpful in the revision process.
Railrugs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
I'd think that Pinkie Pie would say something more like, "Does it have", rather than "Has it". The latter seems more suited to Rarity. And you never know, maybe Twilight and Dash like to do lunges while they kiss? ;)

Yeah it is, I listened to it, and it's some pretty awesome stuff. On your artwork, I sure hope you don't mean drawing a pony ripping out his/her heart like the in album cover!

And no problem, I like to think of helpful Railrugs as best Railrugs.
furor1 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, grammar. Okay, I haven't listened that closely to Pinkie Pie's usage of grammar.

And nope, no heart ripping. Just a cute TwiDash pic that comes to me every time I hear that song.
skipsypony Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow... so, this is amazing. So much <3

I gotta tell you, this is really a motivational and just... awesome story. Now I know I'm a few months late with getting to this fic, but... This... This certainly deserves some fan art of some kind... I may do have to do just that. Heck, I have nothing on my plate to draw, and it's gotta be filled with something! Possibly even... a comic! :O Sure it'll take forever, because I'd want to get as much of the story as I can visualized. But, no story has really struck something in me to push me to do something like this before. I just did a twidash comic, like less than a few weeks ago, but I have no problem with doing more! =P

So yeah... keep an eye out in 2012, maybe... just maybe, a comic will show up. :D

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